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WebSlam VIII – Round 2

Prompts

Submissions are closed for Round 2. Round 3 prompts will be online by 8:00 a.m. Monday, November 13.

Students responded to the following prompts for Round 2. Scroll down to read their work.

  1. Personify* an abstract idea or noun. What does _________wear? Where does _______ go grocery shopping? What does __________ do for a living? Create a vivid picture of character traits and behavior of such topics and themes as death, hope, democracy, courage, etc.
    * Encarta® World English Dictionary Definition of ‘Personify’
    1. to be an embodiment or perfect example of something
    2. to represent an abstract quality as a human being, especially in art or literature
    3. to ascribe human qualities to an object or abstract notion


  2. Be an activist poet: Research and write a poem from a political point of view. Be specific and know your facts. Use the Internet - www.nytimes.com, www.sfnewmexican.com, www.cnn.com, or just about any other newspaper, television network, or alternative news source (www.pitt.edu/~ctnst3/xnews.html) can be found - to research a topic, event or theme that you’d like to write about; e.g., hospice care for the poor, the war in Iraq, plight of illegal Mexican immigrants to the U.S. , exercise for teens, etc.

  3. Write a poem that reflects your relationship with your culture, heritage, ancestry. Dig as deep as you can to learn about who you are and where you came from. What does this mean to you? Your parents? The children you might someday have?

Tips:

  • We advise that you use a word processing program to type your poem, so you can spell check it. Block, copy and paste the poem into the Submit Form.
  • Withhold conclusions—your own feelings of like/dislike, approval/disapproval, etc.—and let the language of your poem do the work of making the reader see your intent.

Poems

Avarice
Maria Orona — McCurdy School
bebop_lucky_valentine@yahoo.com

I eye him while he’s window shopping,
slick black shirt
wrapped around taut muscles.
He eyes me and much, much more.
I see his expensive suit,
his pricey Rolex,
his glittering earrings.
The sunglasses perched on his nose
glint to beckon me forward.
He leads the way into the store
full of diamonds, expensive leather and silk.
Though he wears the diamonds, leather,
and silk clothes, he says,
“I gotta get me some of those.”
We find ourselves gazing at fancy cars,
beautiful machines, with sleek flowing lines.
Our collective eyes light up
with the sudden desire to possess,
to have, to hold, to keep.
He’s knee deep in money,
enough to make anyone weep
As we stroll away, arms full of shopping bags,
he grins that ravenous grin and says,
“I want more.”


Reviewer:     Ann Hunkins, ann@earthear.com
Rating: 9.1
Review: The point of view of “eye”ing avarice while he’s “window shopipng” is great, since Avarice is all about “looking” good. I laughed reading: “He eyes me and much, much more.” The voice in this poem is great. I like the use of “to possess to have to hold, to keep,” echoing the wedding vows and reinforcing the close relationship between the speaker and Avarice. The only place I felt could be improved was at the end. Rather than just “I want more,” I kind of expected the poem to go on to the next level and next thing that he wants. Also, you could throw in a description or two of the “diamonds, leather and silk clothes”, which seem kind of generic, as opposed to “slick black shirt/wrapped around taut muscles” which is quite specific and evocative.

Posted: Nov/12/2006 10:27 am

Reviewer:     Beata Tsosie, beata_tsosie@yahoo.com
Rating: 8.0
Review: This poem does a creative job of giving greed a personality while relating it to the personal experience of the shop-a-holic adrenaline rush. The line “Our collective eyes..” alludes to the consumerism and materialistic pathology that is part of society…maybe a bit more on this connection/addiction? On the same note, I like how the poem is set up.. with the personal voice and experience accompanied by the persona of “avarice.” It creates the impression of being led or tempted by this acomplice. There is a strong description of the male character.. perhaps more detail of the personality and descriptions of the “I” voice used in the poem. It might create more ownership of the situation. Cool!

Posted: Nov/12/2006 10:56 pm

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